Actually, about half of the characters in the story have some sort of white hair on their bodies, but you forgot one thing; the hair is white AND fluffy.
Maybe you should have a look at some pictures of Sonic characters to see who has white and fluffy hair on their bodies. Yes, Silver does, I think Storm does too, but what about Shadow?
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Everybody had heard the scream, they all woke up and it wasn’t long before they were all downstairs, but it was long enough for the killer to escape. Sonic and Knuckles were the first to enter the kitchen, followed by everybody else. They were all horrified to see Tails’ lifeless body lie there on the kitchen floor, surrounded by a pool of blood. Amy and Cream pushed their way through everybody else, only to see the horror of Tails’ murder. Both of them screamed and started to cry, while Sonic slowly walked up to Tails’ body.
“Tails, who did this to you buddy?” he whispered to himself.
Shadow then walked through the dining room, whilst rubbing his eyes.
“Hey guys, why did everyone run downstairs,” Shadow asked while still half-asleep, “what’s so important that everybody needs to run down here at this time of- Oh my God! What the hell happened?”
Shadow was horrified when he saw the dead body lie there, just as everybody was beforehand. Knuckles also walked over to Tails and saw the fluffy, white hairs sticking out of Tails’ hands.
“Hmm. You arrived here a little late, didn’t you Shadow?” Knuckles asked him as he turned around.
Shadow looked puzzled as he replied, “Just what’s that supposed to mean Knuckles?”
“I mean that it’s a bit suspicious that you arrived a long time after everybody else did!”
“I get here a few seconds later than everybody else, so what?”
Knuckles started to get angry and he started to growl a bit, “I’m asking where were you when everybody else rushed down here, you idiot!”
Shadow started getting angry too, “Hey, shut up, it’s not like I killed him or anything!”
Knuckles was so angry, he lunged at Shadow with his fists, only to have Shadow block his attacks and trap him in a headlock. Silver then ran in to stop them from fighting.
“Guys, stop fighting over this! I’m sure there’s a reasonable explanation for Shadow not arriving with everybody else!”
Shadow freed Knuckles, only to have Silver stand in the middle to stop them from fighting. Shadow and Knuckles were both still angry at each other, but they eventually cooled off.
“Well where was he then?” Knuckles asked with a growl in his voice.
Shadow answered his question, “I was still in bed when everybody else came down here, that’s where I was, happy now?”
Knuckles began to glare slightly, “How do we know if that’s true or not?”
Before Shadow could answer, Jet interrupted, “Well, just before I headed out of our bedroom door, I saw that Shadow was still in his bed, so he couldn’t have anything to do with this.”
Knuckles sighed a bit, but then began to argue some more, “I’m still not sure on this.”
Sonic interrupted this time, “Leave it Knuckles, Shadow has been proven innocent.”
“But Sonic I-“
“I said leave it Knuckles. Just-just get back to bed. All of you should.”
Amy stopped crying and began to get upset towards Sonic after this, “What about you Sonic?”
“I-I just need some time alone,” Sonic began to lower his head, “Goodnight everyone.”
Slowly, one by one, everybody else walked out of the kitchen, through the dining room, and back upstairs to the bedrooms. Only Sonic remained in the kitchen.
“Goodbye my friend, you’ll be missed.” He whispered just as he got up.
As he got up, he noticed a dark cloak on the desktop by the sink. He unfolded the cloak and found a knife hidden inside. There was a blood stain near where the knife had been hidden.
“It seems that your killer isn’t very smart Tails,” Sonic said in a slightly crazy, but sad tone of voice, “I don’t think anyone will need this."
Sonic put the knife back into the cloak, folded it up and hid it under the kitchen sink before retiring to his bedroom. Just before Sonic fell asleep, he swore that he would try to find out who Tails’ killer was, and most importantly, keep everybody else safe by any means necessary.
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I know it isn't as good as the previous chapter, but I can't have a murder in each chapter. Besides, chapter two was just to establish suspicions between several people.
Hm, that was a great chapter. I love how you write, the story flows so easily. I like the suspicions you've played against people, they work well with the character's personalities. Good job, I simply cannot wait for the next chapter!
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Originally Posted by Diableos Auros
Actually, about half of the characters in the story have some sort of white hair on their bodies, but you forgot one thing; the hair is white AND fluffy.
Maybe you should have a look at some pictures of Sonic characters to see who has white and fluffy hair on their bodies. Yes, Silver does, I think Storm does too, but what about Shadow?
Oh yeah, Shadow has the white tuft of hair, doesn't he?
Hm, that was a great chapter. I love how you write, the story flows so easily. I like the suspicions you've played against people, they work well with the character's personalities. Good job, I simply cannot wait for the next chapter!
Oh yeah, Shadow has the white tuft of hair, doesn't he?
Thanks. Lol.
But yes, Shadow does have that tuft of hair, Jet and Silver have some too. Knuckles also has some white hair on his chest. There are many suspects.
Edit: Double chapter today!
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Sonic awoke because of a loud knock at his door; it was Amy.
“Sonic, you have to come quick,” she told him, “Knuckles and Shadow are fighting again!”
Sonic jumped out of his bed, “Oh man, what is it this time?”
Amy grabbed Sonic’s hand and pulled him all the way downstairs to the foyer, almost causing Sonic to trip several times.
“I bet it was you that did this Shadow!” Knuckles shouted.
Sonic interrupted their argument, “Wait! What did Shadow supposedly do?”
“He locked the mansion doors is what he did,” Knuckles told him, “the doors are locked tight, none of us can break through them, and so we’re trapped in here!”
Shadow started to argue some more, “Hey, I already said that I didn’t lock them! I came down here earlier because I couldn’t get back to sleep, and they were locked already!”
“Yeah right, you always deny every-“
“Knuckles,” Sonic interrupted, “stop arguing with Shadow!”
“I can actually prove Shadow is innocent like Jet did yesterday,” Rouge began to explain, “as last night you thought Shadow was guilty, when I heard him get out of his room this morning, I decided to follow him, and he came down here.”
Knuckles interrupted Rouge as she was explaining, “That still doesn’t mean that Shadow didn’t-“
“Be quiet,” she shouted, and then continued explaining, “as I was saying, I followed him down here, and then I saw him try to open the door, but it wouldn’t even budge a tiny bit. After that, he tried hitting the door open for half an hour before deciding to come back upstairs, which was the last I saw of it.”
“See, innocent again,” Shadow said as he walked over to Knuckles, “anyway, why are you so quick to blame me? Do you have a guilty conscience or something?”
“No, I was just thinking because it seems to me like you always have something to do with it.”
Just as Shadow was about to start arguing, Wave asked Jet, “Jet, where’s Storm?”
Jet quickly replied, “I don’t know, I thought he was with you.”
“No, I could’ve sworn he was with you.”
Jet looked puzzled, “Maybe he’s still in bed.”
Everybody split up and searched the house, Jet and Wave searched the bedroom, but there was no luck in finding Storm. Just as they were all about to meet in the foyer, there was a loud scream which came from the bathroom.
“That sounded like Amy!” Sonic shouted.
They all ran to the bathroom to find Amy and Cream standing in the corner of the bathroom and a mangled body in the bath; it was Storm.
Jet and Wave walked over to the bath to inspect the body more closely, but all they found was that Storm had been stabbed several times in the back with a knife.
“Storm…” Jet said softly.
“Wait a minute,” Wave said, gaining everyone’s attention, “what’s that on the wall?”
Everybody looked at the wall by the side of the bath; Storm’s killer had smeared the word Babylon on the wall.
“You two better be careful, the killer might be targeting you two next.”
Shadow glared at Knuckles, “How do you know if the killer will or not?”
“I don’t. I’m just saying that because Babylon has been smeared on the wall with blood.”
After a few seconds of standing in silence, Jet and Wave began walking out of the room.
“There’s no point in worrying, he’s dead.” Jet said as he walked out.
After Jet and Wave walked out, everybody else followed except for Knuckles.
“There has to be something here to prove that I’m right and Shadow is guilty.” Knuckles thought as he began searching the room for clues.
Knuckles searched the room for a long time, but there was nothing. He was about to leave the room, until something dark caught his attention. He lifted up the toilet seat and some jet black hairs fell onto the floor.
Knuckles began to chuckle, “Innocent is he? I’ll show him who’s right.”
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Lol.
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