Liking the new chapter.
Typo time. xP.
I was first in line and the miserable Koopa grunt shovelled a big helping of gruel
on my plate,
Should be on, not and.
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“If you want to help me form a freedom fighters group, meet
me down by the Bowser statue after curfew.”
That should be me, not my. ;P
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Again, I'm not going to look for loads of errors, but if I see any that really catch my attention, I'll let you know.