Ok, this is my attempt at a fan fic. Comment casue i want to know what you think. Also if I am in a good mood I might add in some people from this forum. Ok, well here is goes.

Chapter 1
It was a dark and stormy night at Mushroom Castle. Peach paced back and forth in her bedroom. She knew someone had been following her but didn't know whether to tell Mario or not. "Oh, I don't need to worry him. I'll just tell the Shy Guy police." Then she crawled into her bed. It seemed large becasue Mario wasn't beside her. Mario was out with Luigi, they were doing a kart race because of a stupid bet they made. Peach sighed and fell asleep.
MEANWHILE
A dark figure crept up the steps of Mushroom castle. "Huh, my distraction worked" the figure said quietly. The figure had set a bomb om off in the lake beside the castle. The figure quietly opened the door and walked inside. The figure set off for the stairs as quickly and quietly as possible. "I need to hurry" thought the figure. "Mario and Luigi will be back soon." The figure quickly worked it's way up the stairs into Peach's bedroom. She was sleeping when the figure entered the room. The figure pulled out a knife and swiftly shoved it into her back. Peach let out a scream before she died and woke everyone in the castle. The figure pulled out the knife and jumped out the window, into the night.

You're right. maybe I'll change it.

Congrats Gripper! My self esteem has been lowered since no one else replied so you will be the first person from the forum in the story.

Chapter 2
Peach's scream rang through the castle as Mario and Luigi got back from the race track. "What was that?" asked Mario as he walked up the steps. " Ita sounded like Peach!" yelled Luigi in a scared voice. Mario rammed into the door and started running up the stairs to Peach's room. Luigi hurried up after him. Mario reached Peach's room and entered through the door which was slightly open. Mario gasped when he saw Peach in a pool of blood. He saw the broken window and ran over to it as Luigi walked into the room. " What happened!" said Luigi. "someone killed Peach, and I'm gonna find him and return the favor" said Mario angrily as he went to call the Shy Guy police.
MEANWHILE
The figure stood on the roof above Peach's window. He had to quickly hide so that he wasn't seen by Mario or Luigi when they ran into the castle. he stared to come out of his hiding place but quickly jumped back when Mario stuck his head out the window. He decided to climb to the top of the Spire on the castle, that's where he could make his escape. He climbed up the side of the tower and reached the top. He pressed a button on a remote and a signal was sent out to his friends. There was a bunch of loud explosions as a group of bomb oms were sent off. "I hope this works" whipsered the figure quietly. He saw a large figure in the distance. It came closer and he relized it was the air ship that he needed to escape. It pulled along next to the Spire and the figure jumped on and sailed off into the darkness.
MEANWHILE
Gripper heard a loud explosion from the direction of Mushroom Castle. He also saw the large air ship he had been following was heading towards the castle. So Gripper ran off after the ship, towards the castle.

I don't know about people who are reading this but so far I acutally enjoyed reading it!

thanks you are one of ht efew people who HAS read it. it is starting to lower my self esteem. oh, and since u r my friend and you commented i'll add u in it.

pretty good for your first fan fiction 8.5/10

Thanks, I got the idea for it from a TV show I was watching the other day. (you'll be in it somewher too)

thanks koggar

No problem, tell your friends about it. I want more opinions of my work.