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06-20-2008, 10:08 PM
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Yeah, well I hope we don't end up just forgetting to even complete the story.
 
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06-20-2008, 10:52 PM
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ill probably complete it eventually. but u might stop helping after awhile.
 
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06-21-2008, 01:38 AM
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Nice third chapter. :)


Btw, good luck finishing the story! I always have a hard time writing long stories because either I forget what I was aiming for, or I just lose interest in the whole thing... but I've recently tried writing notes for myself too, that way I can plan what I want to do and not important forget stuff...

It doesn't look too good when you write something into a story, but then it suddenly loses all its importance and is totally forgotten about in the end.
 
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06-21-2008, 10:59 AM
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Nice third chapter. :)


Btw, good luck finishing the story! I always have a hard time writing long stories because either I forget what I was aiming for, or I just lose interest in the whole thing... but I've recently tried writing notes for myself too, that way I can plan what I want to do and not important forget stuff...

It doesn't look too good when you write something into a story, but then it suddenly loses all its importance and is totally forgotten about in the end.
I find its really easy to finsih a story,just not easy to have a decant middle prt.
 
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06-21-2008, 05:32 PM
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Well, I'll keep editiing it but I'll have to wait for you to finish it first, lol. Don't worry, I'm in this one till the end.
 
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06-21-2008, 06:57 PM
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I find its really easy to finsih a story,just not easy to have a decant middle prt.
Well, yeah. The content's the hardest part.

When I start a story, I usually know how I want it to start, and how it will end... it's just what happens in between the beginning and the end that takes awhile, cos you have to make sure it all works out, and smoothly. =/
 
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06-22-2008, 05:52 PM
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ill finish it lol. And it will have a decent middle. almost done with the 4th chapter.
 
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06-23-2008, 09:31 PM
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Chapter 4: The Training Begins
Koren was shocked at what he had heard.

“If Elves could do magic all the time then why didn’t they?” Koren thought to himself.

“If they had used magic then Orcs and Humans would try to capture us to find out how,” Ken said.

“How did you know what I was thinking!” Koren yelled.

“Magic is a powerful thing, and many do not know its full potential,” Ken replied calmly.

“If it’s so powerful then why don’t we attack the Orcs and take our place in the land of Mahta!” Koren yelled again this time with anger in his face.

“You have much to learn Koren. Come with me now,” Ken said

Koren got up with out saying a word and followed his father. They went downstairs to the dining hall. No one was there, but the table was filled with food.

“Eat, I’m sure you are very hungry,” Ken said.

Koren ran to the food and started eating. Ken ate with him.

After they ate, they went out into the courtyard. Koren saw young elves running around and playing, while they walked to their house, and Koren sat down on his hammock. Ken was picking up items that Koren would need the next few days.

“Hey! What are you doing?” Koren said.

“You will be gone for about a month, training with the elders. I am helping you prepare,” Ken replied.

“I’m going to be gone for a month! Do I have a choice?” Koren said.

“Do you want to be a hero and save your village or will you stay here and be a burden while your entire race is being destroyed?” Ken screamed at Koren furiously.

“What do you mean save my race? The Elven race is doing fine!” Koren yelled back.

“The Elves are being raided almost every day! You think that is fine!” Ken said even angrier then before.

“We’ve every skirmish, and what do you mean by I am a burden! I am your son!” Koren yelled also getting angrier.

“You are not a burden, I was just angry. I’m sorry Koren,” Ken said peacefully.

“I’m sorry too father,” Koren said.

“Now, do you want to train, or stay here?” Ken asked.

“Train, I won't let you down father,” Koren replied after pondering a moment.

“Good, well your all set, lets go.” Ken said.

Koren followed Ken. They went back into the marketplace. They walked into an armory.

“Welcome Ken and Koren! What do you need today?” The man at the counter said.

“I am here for a battle staff, twenty pounds.” Ken replied.

“Twenty pounds! I can’t wield that!” Koren said.

“Don’t argue Koren, you may be surprised.” Ken said.

“Here you are, I‘ll give it too you free of charge.” The man said easily holding the gigantic battle staff with one arm. Koren noticed he had winked when he said that.

“Thank you Scar, I appreciate it,” Ken said winking back.

They walked out of the armory and walked behind it. After that, they went past all of the houses, and they ended up in the forest.

After about an hour of walking they arrived at an area that looked like an arena. It looked like a small city from far away, but as they got closer Koren noticed it broke up into three sections. One was labeled The Arena, the second was labeled Dome of Unspoken Trials, and the last was labeled The Chamber of Enlightenment.

“Where are we?” Koren asked.

“We are in the ancient Training Grounds of Pais. Here you will be taught all you need to know.” Ken replied.

Koren noticed that his mom was standing in the middle of the three sections, next to another building.

“Hello Koren, I’ve been waiting for you.” His mom said with a soothing voice.

“Mom!” Koren yelled while he ran to hug his mom, who he had not seen for at least a week.

“I’m glad that you are ok my son.” Marie said.

“You need to start your training quickly Koren,” Ken said.

“Alright, good bye mom!” Koren said.

Koren followed Ken once again. They went in a small building that was in the center of it all. There, they saw three people.

“These will be your three trainers, Ry the trainer of body, strength, and will, Spes the trainer of speed, agility and endurance, and Glade the trainer of magic and controlling it to its fullest. They will teach you about all of the hidden skills now that you are of age. You will train with Spes first, then Ry, and lastly with Glade,” Ken continued. “You will stay with each of them for one week, then you will train with Glade for one additional week..”

“Follow me Koren, your training will soon begin. I want to see how fast and agile you are,” Spes said.

“How will you do this? There is no way to get faster in one week!” Koren said loudly.

“Yes there is. With no gravity, anything is possible.” said Spes with a smirk.
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06-26-2008, 07:40 PM
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Wow, this story is really coming along.
 
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i have high hopes for the training chapters. there will be lots of action.
 
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