Ok, so I just thought of this idea of me starting to write this new story tomorrow. It will mainly be about Fintan (that's me) and Wario. I haven't decided yet if there will be other main characters in this story, but expect some new of my own ones and some from the Super Mario series.

There will also be a few featured characters. This may include:

and maybe more!

I plan to make this one of my big stories, so I hope you enjoy!

Announcements
-Auron and Princess Peach are expected to be main characters as they might appear a lot in the story. Status: Unconfirmed
-The mix of series in this story will be: FFX, Super Mario, Animal Crossing and Sonic. As with others, they're unlikely to make a cameo appearance in the story or a small one.

Sounds good =D

One
Wario was zooming on his Wario bike with Fintan following behind on a blue Wario bike. They were both on their escape at high speed in a city at night from Bowser's Koopa slaves. Wario looked behind and shouted "Take them down Fintan!"
There were a few koopas on Bowser bikes tailing Fintan. Fintan looked behind and fired his gun multiple times at all the koopas. One got hit and fell off their bike. There were still more on his tail and both Wario got trapped when more koopas on Bowser bikes surrounded them at the front. Wario drove by while the koopas were firing and Fintan followed. Wario ducked so that a bullet flew just above his head at slow motion. Fintan asked Wario "Where are we going?"
Wario said "Anywhere away from here!"
However, Wario and Fintan were still going at high speed and started being chased by the cops. Fintan heard a police siren, looked behind and shouted "Damn!"
Wario noticed this too, but they both started to speed up and make their escape. More koopas on bikes then appeared from a dark alley and started chasing Fintan and Wario. One koopa started firing his gun, then Fintan with brilliant accuracy hit each of the three koopas in one go each. The police were still on their tail and Wario turned into a narrow dark alley. Fintan wasn't ready, so he went on. A police car had stopped where Wario went in. Two police cars kept chasing Fintan through the busy city. Fintan looked behind, but didn't watch where he was going and accidentally drove over a ramp at a road works. Fintan shouted "Nooooo!", then landed and fell off his bike. The police cars stopped and put Fintan in handcuffs.
Fintan was later thrown into a talk room with an officer. His badge said 'James', so I guess it was his name. Then the man said "Think you're funny?"
"No, I don't."
"So you think that flying through a busy city at 200 miles is acceptable??"
"It wasn't-"
"SILENCE!", and he banged his fist on the table. Then he said "You didn't just speed through a busy city, but I heard you also killed a few innocent people on bikes?"
"They were on to me!"
"Not good enough idiot. You're gonna probably be facing many years in prison and- Hey! Come back!"
Fintan ran out of the room with haste and ran out of the Police station door just nearby. Then Fintan ran to a car and stopped it and ran to the door and said "I'm sorry, but I'm stealing your car."
The woman said "Hey, you can't just-"
"GET OUTTA THE CAR NOW!", and pulled her out. Fintan started to drive and reached a high speed in a matter of seconds.
Fintan was looking for Wario, but he had to hurry since he knew that an evil force would arrive soon. He was flying through the city going around in circles, but soon found Wario driving on his bike. Fintan was chasing behind Wario and yelled "Wario! I'm right here!"
Wario looked behind and saw that it was Fintan. He stopped and Fintan stopped where he was. "Get in."
"I'm not leaving my bike where it is!"
"Fine, you drive on your puny bike, I'll just follow, but hurry."
Wario hopped on his bike and started to drive at a high speed. Fintan followed. Soon after, they were at the outskirts of the city and reached a toll bridge. They drove past it without saying to drive pass. They made it out of the city. Then Fintan drove in front of Wario and stopped him. Fintan got out of the car and said "Wario, wait. What is the point of this?"
"We escape! Duh!"
"I know, but there is no point. Evil is upon us both and it will eventually find us."
"Not with that attitude. Come on, while we still have time!"
Wario started to drive again, but Fintan did not follow. Wario soon stopped, drove back and said "What are you doing?!"
Fintan said "We're gonna have to take out this evil force one time or another."
"Someone else can do it!"
"You just don't get it, do you? They're after us!"
"Eh, why us?"
"Remember that diamond we stole in that museum?"
"Yeah..."
"They want it back. I just know it. That curator Blathers said it was cursed with an evil power and never to be touched."
Then a strange man said "Stop right there!"
Fintan and Wario looked behind. It appeared to be Auron (FFX). He walked over to Fintan and said "You are needed."
"What?"
"It has come and we can't reverse it. We can only destroy it."
Fintan asked "What the hell are you talking about?"
"That diamond you stole. It has released an evil power and has come after you. Therefore you are the one who must destroy it."
Fintan said "It was Wario's idea!"
Auron said "You were the one who touched it first. Come!"
Fintan asked "What about Wario?"
Auron asked "Wait! Do you guys happen to be the ones who stole the other cursed diamond too?"
Wario asked "You mean this one?", and took out a black diamond.
Auron said "Yes. Who happened to be the one who touched that one first?"
Fintan said "Wario."
Auron said "Well, I guess two evil forces are coming. Only Fintan can destroy the leader of one and Wario of the other."
Peach got out of the car that Auron was in and said "So me and Auron will help you both destroy the evil forces, even though you two caused this mess."
Wario said "Ok, why are you here Peach?"
Peach said "Because I'm the ruler of the Mushroom Kingdom and I need to save it."
Fintan said "Are you coming Auron?"
Auron said "Don't you get it? You and I are going to end up in one world and Wario and Peach in another."
Fintan asked "How does he get Peach?"
Auron said "Shut up. Let's just go already!"
Fintan and Auron were sucked into a warp hole, while Wario and Peach into another.

Ok hum firstly, I'll point out what instantly grabbed my attention:

"Fintan said "It was Wario's idea!"
Auron said "You were the one who touched it first. Come!"
Fintan asked "What about Wario?"
Auron asked "Wait! Do you guys happen to be the ones who stole the other cursed diamond too?"
Wario asked "You mean this one?", and took out a black diamond.
Auron said "Yes. Who happened to be the one who touched that one first?"
Fintan said "Wario."
Auron said"

and it just goes until the end of the chapter. If anything, and if you don't feel like typing the description of the environment around the chars or their physical/emotional reactions to each's dialogue, which I strongly believe you should, just don't type Fintan said, or Auron said 100 times.

Just do like this:

"What about Wario?" Fintan stressed, a worried expression being drawn in his face, etc etc.

Get what I mean? Don't repeat the same word so many times, and give life to dialogues by attaching some visible description.


Another thing, you make the action run way too fast.

I won't quote but for example, when Fintan is caught by the police, there should be more drama. Maybe some sarcastic dialogue to turn the police officer upset like you wrote he did. Maybe some description of how Fintan was feeling, his body shaking from the unexpected event, I don't know, it's really up to you.

Saying like you did like: "Fintan was caught and then the police asked and he said I'm out and just ran."?
I mean, if there was such an uproar, shouldn't there be more police? If you wanted to make Fintan escape, why not add some fighting scenes?

Another thing, this is less technical but you kind of ran totally away from Auron's personality, he's not the guy you described. He's a bit more cynical, less bossy and less fast paced.


Other than the criticism I made, the story feels compelling, so keep it up!

I see where you're coming from. Saying 'Said' is something I can't get out of because I can't think of other things other than 'cried' or 'exclaimed', but I will try to do a bit better there.
As for the environment, I'll try to improve there too.

I'm not too good at those things, only spelling and punctuation. I read your commandments the other day, so I'll try my best to improve.

Two
Fintan and Auron fell out of the warp hole onto the ground lying there. Fintan stood up and looked around. He thought he recognised the place. Auron got up and asked "What is it?"
"This looks just like the Mushroom Kingdom! This town has Toads everywhere!"
"No, it's not the Mushroom Kingdom. It's a mixed world where many generations live together."
Fintan looked shocked and asked "Do you mean..."
"Correct. Spira, the Mushroom Kingdom, many different things from different worlds makes up this one."
"So is there a second you here?"
"No, because this is me."
Fintan didn't understand what Auron was saying. He was about to ask, but then asked instead "How do you know all this stuff?"
"Because I just do."
"Are you hiding something?"
Auron laughed and said "Just come with me."
Fintan had no choice, so he just did.
They were both walking around a town which looked like made out of toys with busy Toads seen nearly everywhere working around the place. Fintan looked up at the sky, but there wasn't a sky. There was a ceiling high above. Fintan asked "Where are we? How come there is no sky?"
"We're in Toybox area. We're in an underground place."
They both soon arrived at a train station and Toadette was there standing at the train. Auron asked "How many coins to Tarantula Meadows?"
Fintan asked himself "Tarantula Meadows?"
Toadette said "Sorry, but we're closed for the hour. Come back later."
Auron asked "Why? Lunch hour?"
"No, some idiot stole the business funds and we're trying to find out where it is."
"Then why are you standing here?"
"Because I operate this train and I'm due back to work in around 20 minutes."
Auron turned to Fintan and said "Let's wait somewhere."
"Why are we going to Tarantula meadows?"
"Why? That's where we take out the first beast."
"Beast? But what about that one creature that I just need to take out?"
"I'll explain a different time. Just let's sit over there on that bench and catch the train when they're ready."
Fintan was losing hope for Auron explaining what he had to do to get out of this world, so he just did whatever he was told. They both sat on a bench waiting for the train station to open up again. Then Fintan said "I'm just going to explore around a little."
"Do as you wish."
Fintan sat up and walked around the town of toys. The town was loud with Toads walking everywhere. Houses were basically blocks. Then Fintan spotted lego blocks sitting there in a pile. He ran to them and started messing around with them building anything he could think of. Then a Toad with a green mushroom head and brown spots smacked Fintan across the face and yelled "Don't mess with those!"
Fintan was going to attack back, but then asked "Why you idiot?"
"The Toad Toy Town prophecy. Duh!"
Fintan was confused. "The... Toad Toy Town prophecy?"
"You're obviously a book nerd, not! Go to the town hall and read about it there."
"Where is the town hall?"
"Listen, I've got work to do, so see ya! And just please don't play around with those lego blocks!"
The Toad ran off and Fintan was mad for being smacked in the face. However, Fintan just went back to Auron, sat down on the bench and asked "What's the Toad Toy Town prophecy?"
"It's a legend back many years ago where this place was nothing, but just open space where a hero and a beast fought. The hero won and the beast was defeated and turned into lego blocks. They believe that if the lego blocks are not in this town, the beast would make a savage return. I don't believe in the Toad Toy Town prophecy myself, but I say every villager here does. So they left the lego blocks in the same place where the beast was defeated. I suggest you leave them or the whiners would be at you. What's taking this train station so long anyway?"
Auron stood up which triggered Fintan to do the same. Auron walked over to Toadette in which Fintan followed. Auron asked Toadette "How much longer?"
"We were ready 5 minutes ago. They just didn't announce that like they should've."
"Right, so take us to Tarantula Meadows now."
"Ok, that will be 50 coins per person!"
"50? Yesterday, it was 20."
"I'm sorry, but the lost money wasn't found and they really need the money."
Auron handed over a bag of 100 coins while Fintan asked himself "Yesterday?"
Toadette said "Ok, hop in the first carriage! I'll be right back. I'm thirsty."
"More minutes to waste", Auron thought to himself.
Fintan and Auron got in the first of the 5 small carriages. They both sat down side to side to each other. Fintan asked "What did you mean yesterday? You're hiding something."
"I'm hiding nothing."
"Yeah right."
Then an announcement was made on the train "We're heading for whatever you wanted to go right now!"
Fintan said "That's not Toadette's voice."
"It's simple. Toadette isn't the train driver. Someone else is."
"Oh."
The train started going and was driving through Toad Toy Town. However, Fintan shouted "Stop the train!"
"What is the matter?", Auron replied.
"I looked through the window of a house and Toadette's tied up in a rope!"
Auron jumped off the train. Fintan thought "Are you crazy?"
Auron yelled "Jump!"
Fintan jumped out the door of the carriage. Auron handed Fintan a pistol and said "You'll need this."
"Are we killing people?"
"Only the bad ones. Toadette needs to be saved."

Three
(Wario and Peach)
Wario and Peach fell out of the warp hole onto the ground. They both got up from the wet ground and saw they were in a field in heavy rain. Peach said "I think we should go left from here."
"Wait? Can't we not just destroy the diamond and destroy evil?"
"Yeah, but all of us would die."
"What? How?"
"I think Auron knows why. Just make sure that diamond does not break. Pity my dress is getting wet in this rain."
It was around 12am. Wario followed whatever way Peach went since she had an idea of what way to go. They were both running through the grassy field until someone said "Stop."
Peach looked around and saw guards from behind. Peach said to Wario quietly "From here, we run away and try to escape."
Peach started running while Wario tried to catch up. A guard yelled "I said stop!"
Wario looked behind and saw a few guards chasing them.
"Peach, we need to go faster!"
"No, you actually do."
After a long time running, they both seemed to have gotten away from the guards. Peach looked behind her and said to Wario "Here, you'll need this on your adventure."
"A gun? Now I'll be the winner!"
"Yeah. The first beast we need to kill should be somewhere in this field."
"Beast here? Do we return to our own world then?"
"No. We need to destroy 5 special types of beasts before you face the leader."
"How do you know all this anyway?"
"Auron told me about it. Watch, a fiend!"
Wario looked behind him and saw a wolf charging at him. Wario pulled the trigger of his gun and shot the wolf in the leg. The wolf was limping still charging Wario. Then Peach shot the wolf in the head and it fell to the ground dead. Wario asked "Was that the beast?"
"No. It was a fiend. They're all over this world so I've heard. There's 5 specific ones we need to kill."
"Why? We could just take on the leader now! I'm ready!"
"Look, I don't know why we need to kill the 5 beasts, but I can't remember why we can't face the leader until then."
Peach had Wario puzzled. Then they heard a voice saying "Wait there."
They turned around to see a man. He had short black hair, looked middle aged and was wearing brown clothes that looked like armor. The man said "You're Peach, right?"
Peach said "How do you know my name?"
"It's a long story. I was sent here to destroy a chosen beast."
"Really? We're here to destroy it too."
"Then maybe we should kill it together. By the way, I'm Robert. Who's this one?"
Wario said "I'm Wario the great!"
Robert said "Ok, but take a shower soon, ok?"
"Why you!"
Then the 3 of them were walking with each other searching for the beast. Then they soon heard something and stood still quiet. Then a huge monster the size of a mansion was coming from behind. They all looked behind and were shocked.
Robert said "I wouldn't think it would be this big!"
Robert started his gun at it. Then Peach and Wario were doing the same. The beast was getting hit, but didn't seem to have an effect. Then it was getting very close and Robert shouted "Run!"
The 3 of them started running away. The beast let out a loud roar and started to walk after them again. Wario fell while running and Peach stopped. Robert said "Leave him! It will be too late to get him up!"
Wario shouted "Loser!" and got up quickly. Then Peach and Wario started running again. The beast was still walking, but keeping up. Then a few tanks from behind the beast were there and started firing missiles. The beast was getting hurt, so it turned around and slashed the three tanks in pieces in one go. More tanks came from different directions and started to fire. The beast couldn't take it and let out another loud roar. Then it fell to the ground and it faded away. Wario could see that the beast had dropped a key, so he ran over and picked it up. Peach ran over and said "Now I remember. Auron said the leader's locked up and we need all the keys to unlock it's door and defeat it. We need to get the other 4 Wario! By the way, where's Robert?"
Peach looked around her and Robert was nowhere in sight. Wario said "Forget him."
The both of them then walked through the field again looking for an exit. They soon reached a path and out of the field. The rain still continued. Peach said "I guess we should go up this path."
They walked up it, but they soon reached a small hotel. They walked in and a young woman ran over to them and asked "Are you adventurers?"
Peach said "Yes."
"Then you may stay the night in a room if you want for free for one night only! Care to stay?"
"Yeah, thanks!"
The woman went to her reception desk and got a room key, walked over to them and said "Second room to the left."
Peach and Wario went in their room and Peach jumped onto the bed. She said "Uh oh. One of us will have to sleep on the floor."
Wario said "But it's a double bed."
"I'm not sleeping in the same bed as you!"
"Then you sleep on the floor."
"No, I don't want to."
"Ugh, fine. You're so annoying sometimes."
Peach ignored Wario.