Hello, all my faithful readers, sidekicks and people just happening to glance over this thread. It's been a while, so I decided that it's time to start up the next one of these, now that Summer's going to end. You've all gone to the beach, had parties, played volleyball, and maybe even had a Summer romance. It's time to write about it, and share it with the world!
Introductions aside, i'm your host for this scorching Summer, and i'm accompanied by the forever charming Diableos Auros this time around.
So the theme is of course...
Summer!
This time around, the contest is going to be just a tad different to the ones of the past. I don't care what you want to submit, a poem, a journal entry, or even a novel (Just please, no more than 20 pages). Everything's going to be looked upon equally, and we promise not to make fun of what you write.On top of that, I won't be the only person judging things. I got deadlocked last year, and everything was really late and I apologize. If you read above, you'll notice that Diableos Auros of the green team is going to lend a hand, but there's still an extra spot on the panel open. Drop one of us a line, and we'll see if we want you on the panel.Include your reasons along with a superhero name, and after giggling at you, we'll let you know if you're on. (Note: You don't get anything but kudos for joining the panel)
The Justice League (Our Panelists)
-Noir
-Diableos Auros
-Miss Lost
If you've read this far, then congratulations! However, you've probably noticed how hard i'm asking you to work. This means that i've got to reward all you hard workers, right?
I've been very hard at work this year, and thanks to the overlords help, I can offer you the chance to win a very exclusive award, only owned by three people.
Doesn't it look dreamy? If you already own the award, then you'll just get a second copy of it. No biggie.
RULES:
-Summer themed piece of writing. Just be creative and wacky, or describe what you got up to if it's excited.
-Post your work in this thread, so we can see your lovely thinking mind. <3
-Don't try to cheat. I am the omnipotent Batman, and i'll use the power of google to make sure you didnt cheat!
-Don't say rude things about other people, or be mean in general D= People worked hard on these. So be nice.
But Alex/DA/Third Person, I have a question for you. What should I do? Why, you should send me a message. You can contact any of us in a lot of places, so just ask away and we'll answer to the best of our abilities!
So I wish you guys best of luck, have fun!
Lets see some writing!
Whoops. Forgot to mention that if you want to join the Justice League, you gotta include your superhero name. (Include a reason why you should be on the panel :L)
Hi, I'm Hades. And I'm a mostly good guy. Sure, during my everlasting life, I've done a few bad things, but most stories you hear nowadays about me are blown way out of proportion. It's seems like just since I'm the god of the underworld, people get to make you a bad guy. I'm here to clear some of my "bad-guy" image out. It all starts with a summer many centuries ago.
Have you heard about the story of me and Persephone? Last time I heard it, people were calling the the "♥♥♥♥ of Persephone." First of all, wow. Really? Sometimes mortals can be really annoying with their titles. Oh well, I hope they have fun in Tartarus.
Anyways, I'm getting sidetracked. Where was I? Oh right. The summer where I met Persephone. If you haven't heard the story, here's a little summary of how it's told today.
Persephone, the magnificent angel, is minding her own business when I, Hades, captivated by her beauty, snatch her up. After being forced to give her up by Zeus who had told me to take her in the first place, I trick her to be bound into the underworld for a third of the year every single year. Now Demeter, Persephone's mother as well as the goddess of harvest, is so saddened by this, that she makes crops fail. I'm the bad guy, the end.
Complete crap. Except for the part about Zeus being a douche. That part's true. Do you want to know what really happened? Here you go.
I love the the nice warm days in the summer, contrary to my behavior in my myths. Stupid myths. So this day many centuries ago, I was enjoying a nice break from judging souls down in the underworld, and over yonder, I see her.
Persephone.
Boy, was she something... despicable. The myth says here... that she was a figure of beauty? Nope, not at all. It seemed like a cyclopes and a toad mated, and this deformed thing I had laid my eyes upon was their offspring. Okay, maybe I'm going a bit far with that. But she sure wasn't a thing of beauty, like the myth says. The myth also says she was picking flowers with Artemis and Athena. I got a grudge against them too, but that's another story. Anyways, so they supposedly were picking flowers. Ha, no. They were just crowding another minor god who I forget the name of. They were torturing the poor fellow with insults about his unimportance. So, being the wonderful guy I am, I try to help him out. First, I start shaking the ground to try to scare them off. All they did was scoff.
"Is another one of your scared god friends trying to help you out here?"
"Why is this other god not showing himself?"
"You little insignificant moron!"
were the insults they kept throwing at him. Wait, hold up Hades, you ask. Gods wouldn't do mean stuff like that. It's not like that in the myths, you continue.
Well screw the myths. They are all crap. This is how they really were. Yep, nothing has been changed, I am an eye witness to the foolish actions they did and still do. Of course, I'm enraged by the attitude these three punks are giving me. So I make a crack in the ground, just to give them more of a warning. But I guess their brains were hollowed out that day, because they didn't take the warning. Of course, Persephone trips on a small rock and plunges down into the crack, which opened into my underworld.
Sound vaguely familiar? Yeah. This is the part of the myth where I burst from a cleft in the earth and snagged my catch. Getting back to the story...
So I cushion her fall into my realm with a nice padding I have down in my realm. When you guys come down here, you'll find out it's not really a bad place. I've got some good interior design in here. Call up MTV or something.
You'd think Persephone would be begging to get back up there, but no. She doesn't even have any manners down here. Now at this point, I don't know what Artemis and Athena are doing back up, but I would realize later they'd been doing very idiotic things.
If you ever invite Persephone to your house, you will find here extremely annoying. First of all, she gets all touchy with your stuff.
"Hey, what's this?"
"That's something I use to gauge souls. Now don't you want to go back up?"
"What about this?"
"Hey, don't touch that!" *Crash*
Second, she is really talkative.
"Don't you find it dull down here? The interior design is not up to par!"
"Well, I'd have to disagree..."
"Wow, what are those over there?"
"Souls being judged."
"You're lame."
Now as you may have noticed, this is very different from the nice myth that's been being passed around. And all I wanted to do is enjoy a nice summer day.
So now you know how she in my place. You'd think that, you know, this being an inconceivably ultimate realm, that she'd at least have some respect for the place. Now let's shift over to a different area. Now, I already mentioned Demeter is Persephone's mother. And if there is anyone more annoying that Persephone, it's her mother. She is Persephone times two. Really. Demeter finds out her daughter is missing, and goes into a rage fit. I try to tell Persephone this down in the underworld, but she doesn't care about it. Demeter, being the goddess of harvest, decides to be a little bitc... Eh hem... A little... inconsiderate and stop all the plants from growing. Wow Demeter, nice move. Now I really can't enjoy a nice summer day. Of course, next, Helios, the sun, who sees everything, tells Demeter what he saw. He saw me, Hades, take Persephone down. Man, I wish Helios would've gotten some contacts or something with his -7.50 vision, because as you know, that is not what happened. Love you Helios, but you're getting old man. So Demeter, being the brat that she is, storms off to Zeus to tell him the story.
Now, my brother Zeus isn't a complete idiot. Only 95%. He knows Helios isn't very trustworthy. So Zeus asked for some more witnesses. Of course, Athena and Artemis just happened to be walking by on Olympus when Zeus said this. And they confirmed the completely bogus story. Zeus caves into the demands for the release of Persephone, so he sends Hermes to me to get Persephone back.
So as this is going on, Persephone is still yapping away, and I'm still trying to convince her to get back up.
"I'm hungry."
"Well, if you went up, you could maybe find something!"
"Ooooh, pomegranate seeds!"
"Don't eat anything here!!!"
"mmf... whatyou shay? mm.."
"NO! How many did you eat?"
"Four."
"Great, now you're eternally bound here for four months for every single year forevermore."
"What?!?"
"Look, I tried to warn you. This isn't a little walk in the part for me either, and that's what I really want right now."
You recognize this bit? The part where I trick Persephone into eating the seeds? Well, this is how it happened. So now, after she foolishly decides to eat the binding food, Hermes just comes flying down with his oh-so-fancy flying powers.
"Persephone, I have come to save you!"
"Hermes, I swear. I did nothing wrong man."
"Silence, Hades. You have caused enough trouble. Come along Persephone."
I should probably mention Hermes had a thing for Persephone, so he was acting all masculine and powerful. He isn't really like this, but again, that's another story.
"Thanks Hermes. You wouldn't believe with all the trickery I was put through down here. Let me tell you..."
And that how the cookie crumbled for me. Everything went wrong in my disadvantage. Now, Demeter hates me every time Persephone has to serve her time, and I hate Persephone, for giving me less time to enjoy the nice summers, since it's cut short by Demeter's unyielding attitude.
Oh look, that must be her now, has summer already gone by? Wow, time flies when you're actually enjoying what you have. Oh well, back to working hard to keep everything right, back to bad sleep schedules (gods sleep too), and back to no more fun in the sun. I guess that's the cycle.
"Hades! I'm hungry!"
Well, looks like this is the end of my little spiel here. When I get some more time, I'll definitely clear some more stuff up. Oh, like the one about...
It was a warm day in August, nearing the end of summer. There was a local dog in the town that everyone knew but nobody owned. He was the town mascot with no home and no owner.
The dog woke up from his slumber on the side of the road t an abandoned gas station. He walked to the edge of the town through the endless road surrounded by never ending rows of corn. He finally made his way to Main Street.
The dog went to the local meat shop and the owner dropped some beef down for the dog and he walked happily out the store.
The dog went down for his daily rounds to each store, greeting people on the sidewalk and each store. He grabbed a bone and went on his way with a smile. The people also had smiles on their faces when he met them.
He looked at the sunset off in the distance and made his way back to his humble little home. Things were all closing down, street lights were flickering on, and some stores remained open......
There was a small creek which was his water source most of the time. He got wet and rolled around and was filled with joy before he finally decided to go back home.
He started to run, everything was a blur. It was getting darker and darker as the evening went on and kept sprinting until he saw the gas station in sight and got the the station, but he noticed a new thing. Something not there before
It was white, and there these other things inside it, a bone, two bowls with food and water, and a ball. He sniffed the items and looked at the big white object closely...
It was a house. A rolling house in fact. He saw the open door and went inside and the bottom was covered in carpet. A home. He saw a man working on something until he looked towards the dog. The man got up brought him outside and played with him until it got too dark to see. They were both filled with joy when it came time to go to bed.
He laid down on the floor when they went inside and looked into the distance and started to close his eyes, with a smile on his face as the lights turned off.
He knew someone loved him from that point on and that's what made him truly happy.
Could I be a judge? I wanna become awesome. :p And I was also thinking of sharing what I wrote on Wii Friends...
The Fearsome Earthquake
Wake Up Johnny; Get Ready For A New Great Day. This May Be your Favorite Day Of All.
Oh boy. I could feel My Heart pounding Without My hands. I was very excited. We were going to the one of the Greatest Places in New York City. Central Park. My Mom and Dad told me that this was one of the most famous places In the City. Right in the middle of town. I got Dressed, Ate Breakfast, Brushed My Teeth, and in an hour, we were Out of Home. But first, we had to take our Cat, Louie, And Our Dog, Kurt, to a kennel.
While we were in the car, I started to feel like I was going to explode. I am SO excited! When will we be there Ma? Oh look. We are pulling up into the Lot Now. Boy, it was crowded. We got the last spot, we were very, very, lucky. Well, I thought It was lucky at least. When We were packing Up, I found something. Something very important. Ma, Pa, I think we forgot Lunches! Don’t worry Johnny, we have – GAH! No lunches! Well, Then I really think we have to go to that stupid Fast Food Place “Epic Burger” They have terrible Food there! Well, we could go back home, but It would be another 1 hour and 45 minutes. That really stinks. But then, we saw Our Favorite place of all time that serves food. “Fuddruckers”. Can we eat There Pa? Can we? Can we? Oh! Of course Johnny! What wonderful Eyes you have. And also, when we got to the park, which was a Long way, I saw my best friend, Tony. Hey Tony! C’mon! Oh hey Johnny! We did our awesome secret handshake, Ran around, but then I was lost. Ma….? Pa??? Where are you? I thought I heard them, but I could not see them. From all of the people just randomly flinging their arms and legs across the park, and I could not even Find Tony. But then, I saw them. I ran really fast to them, Saying Ma! Pa! I’m here! Don’t Leave! But they just started Walking, without me. And just about 15 Minutes of running I caught up to them. Ma! Pa! I was lost, *gasp* And I could not find you, *gasp* But now I’m with you *gasp* And I would like to be with you for the rest of the Time! I am not your “Ma” And “Pa”. We are Alexander and Ella. What do your Parents Look like? Well, today my Ma has A Black Skirt On, and Brown Hair, and Orange Shoes, and My Pa has Black Hair, White Shirt, Black Shorts, and Red Shoes. Well, I think I saw them. Really? Where? Right next to us. Oh…. Never mind then… MA!!!!! PA!!!!! YOU’RE HERE!!!! I AM SO GLAD TO SEE YOU!!! We are Too Johnny, but do not run away like that! How many times did we tell you that?? Um… well…*cough* about 11…? No. 9. You should know better. I am sorry. I will not Try it again. But then I heard something very loud. It was a Screech, and then Talking. There may be a cautious Storm People. You may want to find some shelter. But if you want to get yourself killed, don’t. LIKE WHAT? Some random voice said. We have heard that it will either be A Tsunami, Earthquake, and Or Hurricane. I would Love to be In a Hurricane! Lots of Laughs Spread Across the Park. But I did not think that was funny. I was taking this seriously. I was also kind of scared. I hugged My Ma, saying that I was kind of scared. I also did that with my Pa. Maybe we should go to a Building with Shelter. Of course we should! Let’s Hop In The Car! We went, Kind of Ran, To the car. We went in, Backed Up, and Floored It. I mean, we were going almost 90 mph. It was fun, but then I thought of the Storm. So I hugged the Most Soft thing I could find in the car. But then I found My Bear Softy. I squeezed him, and fell asleep. But only for about 5 minutes or so. I woke up Just in time to Go In a Shelter That we found That was open. We Were the First ones In, Lucky Us. We Took Cover, But then I heard Shaking. Fearsome Shaking. Was It an Earthquake? Was it? I told Ma about the Shaking, and she was also scared. For me, I hope this does not mean instant death…
Last edited by FunkyToby1000; 08-23-2012 at 01:57 PM.
Could I be a judge? I wanna become awesome. :p And I was also thinking of sharing what I wrote on Wii Friends...
The Fearsome Earthquake
Wake Up Johnny; Get Ready For A New Great Day. This May Be your Favorite Day Of All.
Oh boy. I could feel My Heart pounding Without My hands. I was very excited. We were going to the one of the Greatest Places in New York City. Central Park. My Mom and Dad told me that this was one of the most famous places In the City. Right in the middle of town. I got Dressed, Ate Breakfast, Brushed My Teeth, and in an hour, we were Out of Home. But first, we had to take our Cat, Louie, And Our Dog, Kurt, to a kennel.
While we were in the car, I started to feel like I was going to explode. I am SO excited! When will we be there Ma? Oh look. We are pulling up into the Lot Now. Boy, it was crowded. We got the last spot, we were very, very, lucky. Well, I thought It was lucky at least. When We were packing Up, I found something. Something very important. Ma, Pa, I think we forgot Lunches! Don’t worry Johnny, we have – GAH! No lunches! Well, Then I really think we have to go to that stupid Fast Food Place “Epic Burger” They have terrible Food there! Well, we could go back home, but It would be another 1 hour and 45 minutes. That really stinks. But then, we saw Our Favorite place of all time that serves food. “Fuddruckers”. Can we eat There Pa? Can we? Can we? Oh! Of course Johnny! What wonderful Eyes you have. And also, when we got to the park, which was a Long way, I saw my best friend, Tony. Hey Tony! C’mon! Oh hey Johnny! We did our awesome secret handshake, Ran around, but then I was lost. Ma….? Pa??? Where are you? I thought I heard them, but I could not see them. From all of the people just randomly flinging their arms and legs across the park, and I could not even Find Tony. But then, I saw them. I ran really fast to them, Saying Ma! Pa! I’m here! Don’t Leave! But they just started Walking, without me. And just about 15 Minutes of running I caught up to them. Ma! Pa! I was lost, *gasp* And I could not find you, *gasp* But now I’m with you *gasp* And I would like to be with you for the rest of the Time! I am not your “Ma” And “Pa”. We are Alexander and Ella. What do your Parents Look like? Well, today my Ma has A Black Skirt On, and Brown Hair, and Orange Shoes, and My Pa has Black Hair, White Shirt, Black Shorts, and Red Shoes. Well, I think I saw them. Really? Where? Right next to us. Oh…. Never mind then… MA!!!!! PA!!!!! YOU’RE HERE!!!! I AM SO GLAD TO SEE YOU!!! We are Too Johnny, but do not run away like that! How many times did we tell you that?? Um… well…*cough* about 11…? No. 9. You should know better. I am sorry. I will not Try it again. But then I heard something very loud. It was a Screech, and then Talking. There may be a cautious Storm People. You may want to find some shelter. But if you want to get yourself killed, don’t. LIKE WHAT? Some random voice said. We have heard that it will either be A Tsunami, Earthquake, and Or Hurricane. I would Love to be In a Hurricane! Lots of Laughs Spread Across the Park. But I did not think that was funny. I was taking this seriously. I was also kind of scared. I hugged My Ma, saying that I was kind of scared. I also did that with my Pa. Maybe we should go to a Building with Shelter. Of course we should! Let’s Hop In The Car! We went, Kind of Ran, To the car. We went in, Backed Up, and Floored It. I mean, we were going almost 90 mph. It was fun, but then I thought of the Storm. So I hugged the Most Soft thing I could find in the car. But then I found My Bear Softy. I squeezed him, and fell asleep. But only for about 5 minutes or so. I woke up Just in time to Go In a Shelter That we found That was open. We Were the First ones In, Lucky Us. We Took Cover, But then I heard Shaking. Fearsome Shaking. Was It an Earthquake? Was it? I told Ma about the Shaking, and she was also scared. For me, I hope this does not mean instant death…
A decent start however I did encounter some problems both in the presentable form, and the grammatical.
Firstly, the font you used made it very hard to read what you had written and I was constantly taking pauses to confirm what different words were. This meant that I was not in a 'rhythm' whilst reading through your story and therefore didn't enjoy as much.
Also, if you were to examine the text you'll notice that quite a few words have unneccessary capital letters. For example, you wrote:
"We have heard that it will either be A Tsunami, Earthquake, and Or Hurricane."
Notice how the words I've shown as bold do not need capitalization. words such as hurricane do not need a capital letter as they are general/nonspecific nouns, however if you were naming a particular hurricane i.e. Hurricane Katrina, then a capital letter for hurricane would be needed. I would recommend revising what you have written and editing it slightly.
Oh a high note, I think that with a few touch-ups this could be a very nice entry :)
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